In our third paper, I focused on completely reorganizing of my paper to allow for an easier time reading the paper. In the introduction, I didn’t really change much but I did focus on clarifying my thesis. In the rough draft, I had my thesis but my peers did not see it very explicitly. In my revision, I made sure to be specific in my thesis moving from a theory or generalized statement to an argument. In regards to evidence, I did not find new evidence because I felt as though the evidence I used was good. I did add onto and expand upon my thoughts and explanations. I also did a little bit of reorganizing within my paragraphs to help make my arguments and explanations flow a little better. In my rough draft, I did not have a conclusion because I wasn’t sure how to wrap it up. I found that after adding more explanations and some reorganization, creating my conclusion was a little easier to do.